The first assignment of the semester was my Entry Prompt. At this time, I was not experienced in the editing process. Early in the term, I found myself trying to understand the difference between global and local edits in my Entry prompt final draft .

Since then, I have made specific changes from my Third Paper Free Draft to my Third Paper Final draft, featuring many significant global and local revisions.

For example, I made a global revision of my introduction paragraph by revising my thesis. My first draft thesis: “Beauty is interpreted differently by every single person in the University of New England community.” I chose to revise the thesis of my essay globally by narrowing the scope of my conversation. For my final draft, My thesis was edited to, “Beauty is interpreted differently by every single person in the University of New England community causing each of us to choose to attend this school for many different reasons”. This change helped to develop my thesis and take a better claim of the ideas discussed in my essay and create the path of the ideas that I wish to discuss.

Another global edit I chose to make was the insertion of an additional body paragraph discussing an outside scientific article explaining their view on art.

My first draft body paragraph: “Beauty is created by chance as opposed to art being created purposefully. As professor Emerson mentioned in the podcast, “Beauty and art not the same. Art can be purposefully ugly…[and is] seek[ed] out unintentionally” (Emerson TIME) whereas artistry is an intentional creation. Beauty is created at an unexpected moment such as when Julia’s RA, Julie, had a conversation with a stranger. The weather was overcast and cloudy but she found the beauty in making a conversation with a complete stranger. It was just an ordinary conversation talking about dogs and the memorial gathering that they were attending. She viewed this conversation with a stranger beauty even though others may not. The odds were not high when anticipating or planning this conversation. It was out of complete chance that this conversation would take place, yet Julie was able to experience the beauty of the moment.”

I revised the paragraph to include the alternative perspective of Allison Ellis by tacting this aspect onto the end of it: “In the article, “5 Ways Animals Can Teach Kids Kindness”, author Allison Ellis, is a mother who explains how animals can help to create the same chain reaction as described above but by the use of animals. She reiterates the concept by explaining that “Stories of animals behaving “kindly” can show kids they can also get along with anyone. Elephants that comfort friends, benevolent bonobos that share food, and dolphins that do favors show kids how animals of all kinds (including the human kind) can provide comfort, patience, camaraderie, and teamwork.” She implies that children can be taught acts of kindness from animals at a young age by observing the way that animals interact with eachother. If it intrigues them, they may start to obtain those same qualities and teach them to treat other humans the same way. People can create moments of beauty affecting others through art and animals’ actions”.

This developed my essay to thoroughly explain contrasting views of Elisha Emerson opposing the views of author, Allison Ellis.

Some Local edits I have made include: “Emerson mentioned in the podcast, “Beauty and art not the same. Art can be purposefully ugly…[and is] seek[ed] out unintentionally” (Emerson TIME) where as artistry is an intentional creation.”

I revised that sentence to: When Syris had asked if she personally viewed art and beauty as the same, she stated that, “I definitely think they are different, I believe art can be purposefully ugly (2:40)…[and is] seek[ed] out unintentionally” (Emerson 1:40).

The local edits I made included adding the correct time to the quote, the correct punctuation, as well as revising word choice when introducing the quote.

Both the local and global edits that I have made to my essay above shows my ability to approach writing as a recursive process that requires substantial revision of drafts for content, organization, and clarity (global), as well as editing and proofreading (local).