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My goals for this essay is to revise my quote integrations. I have difficulty incorporating my quotes from outside sources and relating them to the topic of my essay. To achieve this goal I plan to:

1. Read my peers comments on my draft

2. Read Professor Emerson’s comments on my draft when choosing quotes to integrate into my essay

3. Re-reading the essay of Armstong.

4. Listen to the podcasts I choose to quote again.

5.  Re-read the article of choice i chose to cite in my essay.

6. Try to interpret the readings and podcasts with a fresh perspective to address in my essay.

My biggest challenge will be relating the quotes sufficiently to the topic of my essay. All the articles support their own ideas fully, but to bring them all together to support the topic of beauty. This is challenging for this essay because the podcasts, as well as the articles, do not directly support my view of beauty.

I plan to use my peers’ comments to help get the advice on how to better integrate ideas into my essay that relate to the quotes. I also plan to email professor Emerson whenever confusion occurs as well as contacting other peers and family members. I plan to read my essay out loud to others and note where confusion occurs and be sure to clarify the topic more clearly.

Modes for Free Draft:

Linguistically: I plan to incorporate many examples into my essay as I can to linguistically express these moments of beauty. I plan to choose an original title that applies to my entire essay and what I am trying to communicate.

Visually: I plan to include pictures of what I view as beautiful, what the community views as beautiful, and the compromise of how we intersect and show a picture of where we both can find beauty.

Spatial: I plan to organize and arrange my paragraphs according to my ideas and play with the formatting of my quotes so the words of others can stand out aside from my own.

Intro: My definition of beauty is anything that appeals to your five senses. Although it could be something you see that intrigues you, it could also be a tune you hear a musician playing on the sidewalk. Or a taste of pie from an old rustic bakery reminding you of your grandmother’s cooking. Or the texture of a piece of clothing you found in your favorite store. Or even the smell of a perfume that brings back a memory of a loved one.

Thesis: Beauty is interpreted differently by every single person in the University of New England community.

Claim sentence 1: I agree with Armstrong that the interpretation of beauty depends on the past experiences of each human.

Quote 1: “If we want to understand beauty, we can’t just talk about the things we find beautiful. We have to talk about our lives.” (Armstrong #)

Claim Sentence 2: Beauty is created by chance rather than art being created purposefully.

Quote 2: “Beauty and art not the same. Art can be purposefully ugly” (Emerson TIME)

Beauty has the capability of being “seek[ed] out unintentionally” (Emerson TIME) whereas artistry is an intentional creation.

Claim sentence 3: Anyone can create beauty, that affects more than just themselves.

Quote 3: “seek out unintentionally” (Emerson TIME)

“More importantly, these experiences of beauty teach us how we should be. Not that we should try to adopt the pose or hairstyle of Apollo, or to pick up a bow and arrow. Rather, we should seek to realize in ourselves the fusion of the drives embodied by the sculpture” (Armstrong #).

I chose to read the scientific article, “Recognizing the beauty of science, and the science behind beauty”, from Nature.com. This article explains an interview with Lisa Napolione, Senior Vice President, Global Research & Development at The Estée Lauder Companies. She explains the importance of the scientific aspect behind her beauty line with ESTEE LAUDER and why science can be beautiful. I plan to incorporate the science behind the beauty makeup line and also explain the importance of why science can be beautiful and no so serious sometimes. (https://www.nature.com/articles/d42473-018-00221-x)

The two podcasts I may choose to work with are Julia’s and Syris’s.

https://jcrocker5.uneportfolio.org/a-podcast-about-beauty/

https://shackett2.uneportfolio.org/beauty-interview/

I chose Julia’s podcast because it stuck out to me that someone can connect with a stranger, that they will most likely never see again, and consider it beauty. It was a overcast, cloudy day, and Julia’s RA found beauty in the situation, unitentionally to create beauty.

I chose to connect the unintenional aspect of Julia’s podcast to when Professor Emerson stated that people, “seek out [beauty] unintentionally”. Professor Emerson too, took an unfortunate situation in snowy weather, to find some goodness and beauty out of the situation expressed in Syris’s Podcast.

These two podcasts inpired me to try to be able to notice the beuaty in everything. It is not someoething that you have to do to make something have the quality of beauty, but that it is unitentional.

I view beauty as something that is breathtaking and inspiring. I think the sight of something can be counted as beauty and I also think that the thought of something can also be counted as beauty. I think that looking at a landscape of the mountains is a beautiful sight that cannot be created by man. I also think that a kind gesture and appearance can also be counted as beauty to me. My community at UNE all view beauty differently. I somewhat agree with Armstrong when he explains that your past experiences can affect your view of beauty. Here at UNE, I think we can all agree that the view of the ocean outside the commons is very beautiful especially at sunset. I think I will use the quote, ” beauty is in the eye of the beholder” (Armstrong 1). I believe everyone views beauty differently and I think that if you rely on the concept of what your community thinks is beautiful, that you will potentially be missing the true beauty that is present. There is no wrong way to interpret beauty, and society should not define that. Beauty is a personal opinion and can be shown in a variety of ways.

Podcast:

https://youtu.be/dq9Puvft194

I chose to read Chapter 8 which talks about connecting the parts of essays. This chapter explains that the four steps for “connecting the parts” of your essay to make it most successful is to: 1) using transition words 2) adding pointing terms 3) developing a set of key terms and phrases for each text you write and 4) repeating yourself but with differences.

1. Using transition words: Transition words connect sentences together as well as marking the kind of connection you are trying to make. Examples are: “in addition”, “in other words”, “for example”, “as a result”. Transitions are easy to over use. They should be used in the background of a text where the reader hardly notices. They are not meant to stick out, they are meant to smoothly lead into the next sentence.
2. Adding pointing terms: Pointing words are meant to imply, point to, or refer backward to a concept in the previous sentence. Examples are: “this”, “that”, “these”, “those”, “theirs” as well as simple pronouns like, “his”, “he”, “her”, “she”. These words grab the readers attention and pull them along in the reading.
3. Repeat key terms and phrases: Repeating key terms through an article can create a solid sense of the topic being described. Examples are: synonyms or antonyms. USeful for creating titles and brainstorming claim sentences. 
4. Repeating yourself but with differences: This technique is to reiterate an idea but in different words to offer a better explanation of the topic. Avoids the effect of being monotone while connecting the explanation to the next topic.

Following these techniques help to create a successful essay by connecting your ideas effectively.

With art constantly impacting science, it is important that the two coexist in the world we live in today. They can have a mutual relationship where they both benefit from each other. Science can help art and art can help science. According to Yo-Yo Ma, Art inspires, “collaboration, flexible thinking, and disciplined imagination- lead[ing] to the capacity to innovate”(Ma 258). When art is integrated into the STEM program, it can cause new people to work together as well as enhance thinking and imaginative ideas. Mark Boslough’s ideas explain that “science is now under attack by a budget-cutting Congress to whom dollars have measurable value, but scientific knowledge does not”(Boslough 3). If Congress cannot give enough funding to the sciences, it will equally affect both science and art to their expense. Art will not have the science to back it up and scientific knowledge will not be passed on if there is not a budget to test it or the collaboration, flexible thinking, and imagination. One simply should value both art and science so they can coexist and mutually benefit together.

After considering the thoughts of Yo-Yo Ma, I think that the STEM program should continue to be carried out without the presence of art involved. Many artists would object exclaiming that art is important in the aspect of empathy, imagination, and equilibrium, but art should be left in its own category. Art is its own creation and is not related to the aspect of Science, Technology, Engineering, and Math.  I feel that creativity and the aspect of imagination in math does not match and would not be well integrated with the reasoning behind the STEM program. Art has the quality of freedom to express yourself whereas STEM has more distinctive reasoning and specific way to complete the requirements, which art does not follow. Although some may think it creates an equilibrium in humans, I personally think that you are either have a STEM mind or an Art mind. Not both.